Saturday, August 29, 2009

The Rover's Rhapsody

He wriggled to the nearest room,
His chin felt the sand,
His arms his paws.

Belonging to thee, he felt-
motionless, spiritless;
Wanting to reach thee, he tried-
but was he still, or
the land versus.

Pale skin had a mush-
of dreams, of blithe.
But the wind swept,
the way against.

The dawn was way gone,
the day was gloomy,
the room distant.
Didn't see an option, a way.
The path was pined.

But he kept making-
a path, an attempt,
to reach the horde,
to see his own.

And a fine trice soon came
the wind blew smoother,
the pine felt soother.
And he reached his mates.

One thing was lost, though.
It was - a spirit, a life.

And the man's corpse
witnessed it all.


© Rajat Mahajan. 2009

8 comments:

Jenny said...

Rajat,

This shows a new side of your writing. At least, new to me, as I have only followed your blog a short while yet.

The imagery of the person's struggle at the edge of life/death is so skillfully depicted.

Very powerful and well-written!

ecstatic shimmeR said...

Hey Jenny!
Thanks for such nice words. I wished to write something like this for a long time and even today, while writing this one, I began thinking something else and ended up with this.

I am always amazed to get such nice reviews on the most impulsive of my works. :)

aditya said...

Everything you write flows ... Though rhythm or flow is certainly not my forte, but I like your works.

According to me being impulsive never stifles the ingenuity or the creativity of your works. Anyways impulsive or not, you always write well and I enjoy reading you as such!
Keep writing ... :)

ecstatic shimmeR said...

@aditya
Its actually the generosity at your side that makes these words to shine out. I just do a mere writing part but as said,
Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder, so a big thanks to you..!

And the amazement is still on a high..

Jenny said...

Impulsive writing is very interesting. To let the mind wander a bit.

Btw, now that my blog is private, the update service for new postings does not work, unfortunately. But I usually post about once a week, so please drop by when you can anyway. I really appreciate feedback. :)

ecstatic shimmeR said...

Yeah, I noticed that.
So I went on to the blog and saw it. Read the new post as well.
Sure thing, i'll be regular reading it.

MaNaN MaHaJan said...

serious work of art manh...u surely one hell of a writer..keep the work up manh....

ecstatic shimmeR said...

Hey manan,
I had been waiting for a comment from you for a long time...
and finally i got it... :)

As I mentioned earlier, you were my inspiration buddy...not the for the poem, but for blogging. ;)